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After the Fire

Posted on 2008.03.21 at 16:33

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Shotgun
shotgun9 at 2008-03-24 02:15 (UTC) (Link)
The imagery! It's like candy.

Of course there was a war on, or so everyone had said.
I'm dying over here. Really.

Okay, when I heard you pitch this, I was a little worried it was going to be too... linear? Hahaha! Right. The structure is just perfect, the blending of consciousness, past and present contributing to the growing tension as well as communicating the necessary background. And Ellen. Oh, Ellen. You've got her voice spot-on. Simple, logical, reasonable with an underlying thread of caring and sentimentality that reveals itself in her actions, not her words.

Fantastic.


[Truckee? Hee. I'm taking that as a shoutout, thankyouverymuch. Didn't you have a Donner Party plot bunny floating around? Can I offer it carrots or lettuce?]
Corvus Imbrifer
corvus_imbrifer at 2008-03-24 17:39 (UTC) (Link)
Well, it's not a real 'story,' just a lot of ideas that I'm making Ellen speak out loud, in exactly the fashion I roundly condemn when the show does it. And I couldn't quite bring myself to burn down Truckee after having it taken over by zombies, aren't you glad? It's the Coyote Moon Golf Course that I think needs to be written about. (It's probably very dull in real life. Who needs real life?)

Thanks very much!
Shotgun
shotgun9 at 2008-03-26 03:17 (UTC) (Link)
Yes, but there is a story there (though maybe not in the traditional sense), amidst the beautifully-cloaked meta ;) And I very much appreciate that sort of complexity.

I fall at your feet, oh merciful Raven. I am an open book -- should you need pictures, descriptions, embellishments...

[Oh, P.S. -- you did submit this to Ms. Ferris, didn't you? Because I'll be disappointed if you didn't.]
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