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After the Fire

Posted on 2008.03.21 at 16:33

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sylvanwitch
sylvanwitch at 2008-03-22 03:38 (UTC) (Link)
It's extra-fun for me, gifted as I have been with all our many conversations about the show, to hear in Ellen's voice and in this piece your ideas about where the show should have gone, plot-wise, and who these boys really are, character-wise, what drives and motivates them. It's great, too, to see Ellen's development here, to see her fleshed out into the level-minded, clear-thinking leader she's clearly so capable of becoming on this show, if only the Powers That Be would let her. The catalogue in that last longer paragraph is a brilliant summation of every angsty thing that makes these boys damaged, and Ellen's solution is so simple, her final words so profound, that it really ties together nicely everything you've reflected on, via Ellen, throughout the story.

I like the way you incorporate the previously unknown network of people touched by the Winchester boys. I especially got a kick out of Hell's Sorority and the idea of Jo at a Marine base. ;-) Bela ending up in Lenore's tender care is delightful, as well. If anyone can teach the woman impulse control, it's Lenore. I noticed a decided lack of Ruby, but I'll leave my comment there, having firmly bitten my tongue.

I also wanted to say how much I appreciated that "my" people got a shout out, i.e. the believers who turn out to pray away the demon hoard led by Lilith. That was a very refreshing reminder that there are "good" witches (and others of other religious ilks) out here, fighting the good fight.

Finally, I thought Ellen's reflections on God, demons, and deals were very apt and interesting, although I'm well aware, as I'm sure you intended it to be obvious, that this is meta wearing fiction's coat.

All in all, this is an excellent character study, highly entertaining and interesting. There are a few little typos and things, but I figured you know that already. I'd be glad to offer my services if you need a pair of fresh eyes for the little nonsense things.

Anyway, bravo! *claps and whistles*
Corvus Imbrifer
corvus_imbrifer at 2008-03-22 18:20 (UTC) (Link)
It really is a poorly disguised meta, isn't it? Got carried away. But it was only meant to answer the one question! Got off the leash, you know.

The network of people are all from prior episodes, only one name (Marlowe) is not from the show. I made a little list. Couldn't even work in everyone they've saved, never mind anyone from anyone beholden to John or Bobby or Bill Harvelle. I should have provided a key. The point is: just calling on named guest stars forms a diverse and formidable group ready to stand up with the Winchesters.

Typos? Typos? Serves me right for not having this proofread.

Thanks!
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