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Dear Uncle Michael

Posted on 2007.05.27 at 10:39
San Diego, California. A few weeks after 'All Hell Breaks Loose, Part II'

Many, many thanks to simpatico for using both her scalpel and club.


abgrubb at 2007-05-28 17:52 (UTC) (Link)
Bastard! Make me cry over fan fiction.

(Oh, yeah: I don't know you, I saw this recced at TWoP, blah blah blah).
ficwriter1966 at 2007-05-28 20:08 (UTC) (Link)

Well done!!

I promised I'd mend my ways and leave feedback, so here I am. Beautifully done!! I have to go back and reread it quietly, but even on first read it's touching and surprising and just lovely. Thank you for sharing it.
faithintheboys at 2007-05-28 22:43 (UTC) (Link)
Oh. That was just so sad, but so great. I mean amazing. I love how he has only one year and so does she, and that they are perfect for each other in so many ways. Great job, I loved this!
trystan830 at 2007-05-29 01:54 (UTC) (Link)
(here via one of the fic comms)

this is totally awesome. really. i love the concept too. just... wow.
aliskye at 2007-05-29 17:17 (UTC) (Link)
Darn you. When I started reading it I thought it was rambly and not think-y and not like your usual style but as I got in to it (and you twisted the knife) I could see the build up and the use of language and the clear vision of the characters and the emotion.

tsubaki_ny at 2007-05-29 21:16 (UTC) (Link)
Wow! When you said formatting, you really meant formatting!

Like I said, voice and character POV here is phenomenal. Lovely.
50 Cents & Some Lipgloss
valueofaloonie at 2007-05-30 01:33 (UTC) (Link)
For a second I was sure I had clicked onto the wrong page, but....

Great, great fic.

(And I'm also here from TWoP.)
Little Pasta Knows Her Words
graziaplena at 2007-05-30 03:59 (UTC) (Link)
I am so impressed by the voice you've found for this character -- you've just nailed it. It flows so smoothly, I'd never guess you weren't a 25-year-old commercial model yourself. :)

And as always, your eye for detail is unerring.

More, please!
The Beauty and the Mess
lynzibell at 2007-05-30 04:27 (UTC) (Link)
This is awesome! Here from TWOP! You made me fall in love with a character that I never thought I would want to be with Dean in the real world. Love how hopeful she was and how she percieved the boys. Great job!
areawomantwop at 2007-05-30 09:48 (UTC) (Link)
Oh my. Your voice is unrecognizable! You made her real.

You know, you could send them a resume just to humor me.
qzxy at 2007-06-04 05:34 (UTC) (Link)
Finally recced you on my journal (was trying to come up with the words without giving anything away -- not sure if I succeeded :P). Anyway, it might sound over the top, but I really did love this. I already liked Carmen, but you've realized her maximum potential here and I treasure it. You really nailed the characterizations, the voices. I like that I got a feel for Uncle Michael as well; it makes Carmen's world richer and more real without being too intrusive or out of place in the story. The epistolary format works so well, too, letting the story unfold organically as the reader discovers what's going on. It really gives the story its punch, IMO. Was the story always that way, or did you think of it later? Anyway, I loved it completely. :)
qzxy at 2007-06-04 05:37 (UTC) (Link)
Gee, could I have said "the story" any more in this comment? *busts out thesaurus*
morbidmuse at 2007-06-05 00:55 (UTC) (Link)
Excellent job with this. I love how you set it all up. ♥
boogirl13 at 2008-01-04 22:31 (UTC) (Link)
Whoa. I did not see that coming and was happy to hear from Carmen again. I like how you picked up on Dean's wanting a "normal" life and running with it. And that Carmen only has as much time as Dean so neither will be left alone.

Again, very nicely done. My (our) poor Dean. I'm glad he has some happiness before the end. 'Course if he'd stop by my house, he'd have a lot more. *le sigh*
Corvus Imbrifer
corvus_imbrifer at 2008-01-05 03:47 (UTC) (Link)
I'm glad you noticed this little thing, and enjoyed it. I just found it so tragic that of all the women he's encountered, none have managed to fit the idea he has for himself. (Except perhaps Sarah Blake, and she went off the list in a blink.) But moreover, I thought how sad that of all the magic he's encountered it's only brought unhappiness.

On the upside: do we really think, once Sam has been informed, that he's going to allow the loss of either Dean or her?

boogirl13 at 2008-01-05 04:22 (UTC) (Link)
Oh, no!! Of course not. And if you could get to writing that story, I'd be ever so happy.
sylvanwitch at 2008-01-06 05:11 (UTC) (Link)
Oh, man, this is like a punch in the gut.

You do know how to do bittersweet, don't you? There were parts that had me smiling (I LOVE the voice--perfectly intimate, casual, human, and REAL) and parts that had me near tears with realizing, and you unraveled the mysteries so nicely, in terms of timing, that it wasn't like being punched really hard and fast but more like a very slow-mo swing that you see coming and you know is going to hurt and you know that you can't duck and for some reason you don't want to.

You rule!
Corvus Imbrifer
corvus_imbrifer at 2008-01-07 22:08 (UTC) (Link)
I had to go back and un-spell check it. She was such an intriguing presence, I thought, and her brief appearance stood her in the good company of the women of the show, the Officer Kathleens, the Laylas, the wonderful Sarahs. And many others, none from season three. Ahem.

Wait, near tears? Drat. Back to drawing board.
when you can't get through it you can listen to it
sj0126 at 2008-01-09 20:47 (UTC) (Link)
recced at winabler here
Corvus Imbrifer
corvus_imbrifer at 2008-01-10 01:34 (UTC) (Link)
I've not visted there, I'll go read! Thanks!
borgmama1of5 at 2017-04-30 13:12 (UTC) (Link)
Your stories are gifts to fandom! Wish there had been more :)
Corvus Imbrifer
corvus_imbrifer at 2017-04-30 16:17 (UTC) (Link)

Hello there!

Thanks for saying so! I wish there had been, too. The show changed over time (as it must) but I found it hard to follow along with them. I'm still watching, of course, but it's a different investment. I'm glad you were able to return to the characters as they were then - almost don't recognize them now.

Thanks again!
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